This is an animated presentation video about my argument. I've never really done anything like this before so if I didn't get the message across or it seemed too short or too long please let me know. Any tips on how to improve the video for the project would be great thanks!
Steven
First off kudos for being creative with this assignment. I think that the pace and the length of the video is great, you are able to give enough information for your audience and manage to avoid becoming boring. There were a few grammatical errors I found but in terms of global revision you don't need to change much, I would just have a stronger ending. Maybe give your audience a question to consider, or links to organizations on both sides of the argument.
ReplyDelete"And although you are getting the facts, the media may be telling it in a bias way."
*remove comma
"Having proper information from both sides of the controversy is important *on forming your own opinion."
*to
*Capitalize "African American"
"There have been numerous protests as media coverage on police killings *have grown over the past few years."
*has
"and argue that the police are out in the community *ot protect and serve."
*to
"Many people who are against BLM are expressing an all love matter approach and don't see the need *in these protests."
*for
"This may cause a bias approach depending on the news station,"
*Depending on the news station this may cause a biased approach* suggested re-wording.